Brainstorming an Elevator Speech

Mr. Phillip J. Rhoades, my the Chief Programmer of my burgeoning agency, popped me a message on Google Talk asking me what he should or could say if someone asked him what he does all day, every day — an elevator speech.  Well, I gave it a go, writing one for myself.  After I shared it on Facebook, Mr. Glenn M Jenkinson gave me some awesome advice — a complete rewrite — thanks Glenn!  So, please check these two out, starting with that I wrote and followed up with that Glenn wrote.

My Version

I run a boutique digital PR and brand marketing firm with national and international clientele encompassing 35 staff, 5 Continents, 12 Countries, and 11 Languages

Our bread and butter is blogger outreach. We’re able to reach out to thousands of bloggers earning hundreds of earned media mentions from bloggers from around the world.

In addition to blogger outreach, we also develop and curate social network and social media campaigns on behalf of non profit, commercial, online, and startup companies worldwide.

Abraham Harrison has the rare experience of doing social media campaigns not just in American English but also in Latin American Spanish, Brazilian Portuguese, and Polish, with capabilities in Russian, Japanese, Arabic, German, French, and Italian.

My firm is virtual. My partner and CEO Mark Harrison, is based in Berlin and Mauritius and I am based in Berlin and Washington, DC, but my staff truly does cover 5 Continents, 12 Countries and 11 Languages, with my two directors living in Arlington, VA, and outside Philadelphia.

We always make sure we hire the best people possible. We also make sure we can cover as much of the clock as possible, aiming towards 24-hour coverage. Additionally, when we do campaigns for cultures outside of the United States, we always make sure our analysts are not only native speakers but also culturally native as well.

Glenn Jenkinson’s Rewrite:

Company leadership and employees are located across the globe to provide service 24 / 7 / 365. Our primary offices are based in Berlin, Mauritius, and Washington, DC. We communicate with our clients via live streaming video to add extra synergy.

Would you or someone you know like to experience the rare ROI our system provides? Here is my contact information, do you have a business card?

I am co-owner of an international boutique digital PR and brand marketing firm with domestic and international clientèle on 5 Continents, 12 Countries, using 11 Languages. Our skill set is very rare as we are one of a very few firms that have been producing social media campaigns internationally for years. We always make sure our analysts are not only native speakers but also culturally native as well…. See More

Our specialty is getting our clientèle many hundreds of free or negligible-cost media mentions all around the world. We do this with our ‘laser-targeted’ Blogger Outreach technique.

We also develop and curate social networking and media campaigns for non-profit, commercial, online, and startup companies worldwide.

So, what do you think?  To haughty? To rife with hyperbole?  Should there be more focus, more narrative, more reference to ROI, metrics, or past and present clients?  Much obliged in advance and thanks to Phillip for putting this in my craw.

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